Distant Tears

[Cubia]

Ah yes, I finally decided to put up another fan poem! Wooooo!
Well as you will see, it's another Lenalee POV poem (for some reason I enjoy writing her)...it's sorta like how I imagine her parting with Allen, if he ever 'leaves' or *cough*dies*wheeze*, or something of that sort. Hmmm I tend to make these always depressing...jeez I'm such a freakin' loser for type of thing. >_> and it sorta rhymes too

Edit: yea I realized the poem looks a lot nicer centered...heheh

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Tenderly taking

the tips of my fingers,

to his loving lips...

reflection of my

stained-glass soul

seen in his eyes

moonbeam smiles

dance across his face,

leaning in

whispering

babys-breath words,

all too often heard

"You'll always be

my blessing"

as a single aching tear

spills over his

cheek,

he

walks

away.

[Exkila]

Haha so you finally came out of your sulking corner and submitted a new poem! Good job man, as usual, your stuff is always touching

[moonlight_sonata]

Awww how sad. I love your style:so touching, as Exkila san says.

[Remorse]

I like it. I mean, who cares if it's depressing. I mean...I got reported in school for a poem....hehe...*heart wrench* Hurts to think about it.
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Ahhh, I like your use of metaphors and personifications. It reminds me a bit of this Hip-hop star Tablo. He writes so lyrically and not in a bad way.

I seriously need to submit a poem here...

[moonlight_sonata]

you got reported in school for a poem....? Wha?

[Remorse]

@ moonlight_sonata: It's a story with a happy ending.

Um, a former teacher I'm real close to reported me for a wrist cutter emo poem. After I was cleared up, thankfully, I started giving up on writing. I guess I relented after what happened. She told me not to give it up for a misunderstanding. It took my 2 months, I visited her and I told her that I wrote something.... but I ripped it up. She told me to meet her the day after. I met her. I let my heart out. It was the day before vacation she hugged me, though, I was reluctant at first. I felt better. Then during vacation, I wrote her a poem. Then, I gave it to her after vacation. The day after that she tried to give me a hug again, I was still hesitant at first. Now, I'm comfortable giving her poems and now I give her hugs which surprises her. She helped me recapture an ambition that I wanted to give up. She told me I had talent. She really cares about me and stuff. I feel all fuzzy inside. Hurr-hurr...

But let's not talk about this further.

[Cubia]

I like it. I mean, who cares if it's depressing. I mean...I got reported in school for a poem....hehe...*heart wrench* Hurts to think about it.
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Ahhh, I like your use of metaphors and personifications. It reminds me a bit of this Hip-hop star Tablo. He writes so lyrically and not in a bad way.

I seriously need to submit a poem here...

Ouch, yea that's happened to me before in high school, they thought my writings were very...violent? Lol the teacher reported me and sent me to the Dean and I had a 'pleasant' discussion with him on my writings

And thanks everyone for all the kind feedback! It makes me feel quite special indeed.