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    Tyki landed with a hard thud into the sand below. As Lenalee was about to take off after him, she was jumped from behind.


    "Lenalee! Go back! He'll kill you!" implored Allen, as he held her close. Her boots were the only thing keeping them from falling to the earth together.


    "Allen-kun! What are you doing?" she cried, surprised at his sudden proximity.


    "Please, go back to headquarters!" he spoke into her ear, begging her.


    "Don't you understand? They've revoked your status as an Exorcist because of this! In a few minutes, they're going to issue an order to make us hunt you down. We have to get you somewhere safe for now!" she yelled back at him as he awkwardly swung from her neck and shoulders.


    Before Allen could respond, Lenalee was swallowed up in a swarming vortex of beating wings and voracious gluttony. As he had feared, Tyki had sent out his mass of Tease and set them on Lenalee. As he and Lenalee plummeted to the ground, Allen made sure that he was under her to break her fall.


    Allen blacked out for a moment on impact but he awoke to the sound of Lenalee's screams. He knew immediately that his dreams would be haunted by that sound from this point forward.


    "Thanks for your help, boy. I am sure I would have gotten her sooner or later. My Tease never miss their victims once I send them out. But your little distraction just kept it from dragging out longer than it should," explained Tyki as he sauntered up to them without so much as an indication that he had been injured just moments before.


    "Get them off of her!" Allen demanded as he slipped out from under Lenalee and began ripping the Tease from her with his bare hands.


    "Now now…be gentle. They've already latched onto her pretty well. If you start grabbing them like that, you'll only tear pieces of her away along with them," Tyki said with a smile. "Not that I'm against that or anything."


    Allen stopped. He couldn't tell where the Tease ended and where Lenalee began. All he could hear from underneath the undulating mass of wings was her screaming in agony.


    "Make them stop, Tyki!"


    "She has a very interesting Innocence, this one. It's in her blood, I can smell it. Almost like yours but…different. The only way to separate her from her Innocence…is to bleed it all out of her…."


    Tyki trailed off, and, as if sensing his bidding, the wings of the Tease beat faster and they began to meld into a single large Tease that was now sitting atop her chest. Allen could see that Lenalee was covered in small bleeding wounds where the Tease had begun to dig into her. Then the large Tease disappeared into Lenalee through her chest.


    Allen looked on in shock as larger wounds began to open up on Lenalee from the inside out. Open cuts appeared on her wrists and along her stomach and blood began to slowly seep out.


    "No! Stop it! STOP!" Allen shouted at the top of his lungs as he lifted Lenalee's writhing body into his arms and held her against him.


    "What are you doing, boy?" Tyki asked, genuinely curious.


    "If you don't stop, I'll do it. And you'll never get me to the Earl the way he wants."


    Tyki looked Allen over carefully. As the boy cradled Lenalee's slack body with his right arm, he had activated his left arm and the sharp, knife-life protrusions of his hand were under Allen's own throat, cutting into the delicate skin there. The expression on his face was the same as the time he had held Allen's beating heart in his hands as he threatened to pull it out while he was still alive. There was no question about who was more determined at this point.


    "Oh…you're quite serious, aren't you?" he stated, raising his eyebrows innocently.


    "You know I am. I won't let you do this to her. If you do, I'm going with her," Allen said in an eerily calm voice.


    "Let her go, Tyki," said Rhode from behind them. Timcanpy had landed just a few yards away and apparently Rhode had woken up and witnessed the entire exchange. "You can play with her another time. Right now, we have to get Allen back to the Earl in one piece, you know that."


    Tyki sighed. "I suppose you're right. Who knew he had it in him to play this particular card, though, cheater that he is? I will have to keep it in mind."


    With that, the large Tease oozed out of Lenalee's body, returned to Tyki's hand and was absorbed. Allen ripped off Tyki's coat and shredded it with his teeth, creating long strips. Tyki Mikk didn't bat an eye; highly bemused by Allen's behavior. He quickly wrapped Lenalee's more serious cuts to stem the bleeding as the smaller wounds initially created by the Tease seemed to be coagulating already. Allen's heart felt pangs of guilt as he bandaged up her wrists, remembering the stories she told him of similar injuries she inflicted upon herself when she had first arrived at the Order.


    "Come now, boy. It's time to go. You heard what she said. They'll be after you any moment now."


    "You knew exactly what would happen…" stated Allen.


    "Of course. It could have gone more smoothly but this is the same result. Anyway, I can't complain."


    "Allen…kun…" whispered Lenalee, hoarsely, as she regained consciousness.


    "Lenalee! You're going to be okay!" Allen cried as he picked her up and placed her gingerly into Timcanpy's mouth.


    "Wait…what are you…you're not leaving…." Lenalee uttered, unable to reconcile what was happening and how weak she felt.


    "Timcanpy…take Lenalee back to Headquarters. Stay with her and take care of her for me, will you? I'm counting on you," said Allen, as he held Lenalee's hand. He felt the weight of it, the warmth of it; he wanted to try and memorize how it felt for as long as possible.


    "Allen-kun, don't leave me. I can't…" she began to say as the tears began to fall down the smooth planes of her face.


    "Lenalee…" said Allen, as he leaned into her and whispered in her ear, "remember what I said to you in the Ark? At the dinner table? Believe in me…" and with that he pressed his lips lightly on her forehead then pulled away.


    Lenalee reached out for him but she found no hold, no purchase. Even though she felt like she was running after him, she found herself still lying prone in Timcanpy's mouth.
    "I'm ready," Allen said simply, his back turned to her.


    Lenalee watched as Rhode opened up her Gate and they began to step through it. Allen looked over his shoulder to see Lenalee one more time. He smiled that comforting smile, hoping she would believe that everything would be all right. She hated that smile and she began to cry earnestly.


    The Gate closed and disappeared, taking Allen with it. Timcanpy lifted off and headed back toward Headquarters. And Lenalee…Lenalee was never the same.


    TO BE CONTINUED in Part 5

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    i really wish that this happened in the series..TT_TT
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    Quote Originally Posted by Llaimrid View Post
    i really wish that this happened in the series..TT_TT
    i wrote this fic a few months ago and then i read chapter 205 when it came out and i was just happy that allen and lenalee actually got to see each other and say a few words (and hug!) before allen disappeared into the gate. even though it didn't happen like i would have wanted it to, i'm just glad hoshino even gave them those few moments (since we'd only seen lenalee, what, like in 3 panels for the past 50 chapters?!?!?!?!).

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    ewww... Tyki's too evil....
    But yes, I agree, this would have been good!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Rhode View Post
    ewww... Tyki's too evil....
    But yes, I agree, this would have been good!
    really, you think tyki was too evil here? tyki is just being...tyki LOL. he didn't do anything more or less here than he did to allen in the bamboo forest when he put a hole in allen's heart. just keeping in the same vein as that :-)

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    wait... didn't do anything more or less?
    TORTURE!
    XD In this one, he's causing harm to Lenalee. It's not a direct order from the Earl to kill her.
    For Tyki, the fun is in the fight, and the thrill of the death blow. Not from standing back and watching demented butterflies rip appart a young girl.

    But it was necessary to get Allen to come with them willingly... You could, (if you want) edit it to a threat... Tyki could knock her unconsious and then threaten her with Tease, while Allen shouts to stop, and eventually agrees to go with them (was he unwilling before?)
    Although, the trauma for Lenalee would be minamised... which wouldn't suit the rest of the story?

    Hope this helped!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Rhode View Post
    wait... didn't do anything more or less?
    TORTURE!
    XD In this one, he's causing harm to Lenalee. It's not a direct order from the Earl to kill her.
    For Tyki, the fun is in the fight, and the thrill of the death blow. Not from standing back and watching demented butterflies rip appart a young girl.

    But it was necessary to get Allen to come with them willingly... You could, (if you want) edit it to a threat... Tyki could knock her unconscious and then threaten her with Tease, while Allen shouts to stop, and eventually agrees to go with them (was he unwilling before?)
    Although, the trauma for Lenalee would be minamised... which wouldn't suit the rest of the story?

    Hope this helped!
    ha! are you kidding?! tyki is totally capable. otherwise he'd just be a brainless pawn of the earl. though the earl did tell tyki to delete allen, he didn't tell him HOW to do it. so did tyki just carry it out exactingly? no. he took his sweet time taunting allen, jabbing his hand into his body, telling him how he could rip his heart out if he wanted to. and then, when the time came to kill him, did he mercifully kill him? no, he left allen to die a slow, agonizing, and yes, torturous death, by purposefully leaving a hole in his heart so he'd bleed and feel his life leave him. tyki doesn't need the earl to tell him to kill people...the noah have been doing that directly and indirectly (with akuma) for generations. how they choose to do so is part of their own character and choice. and, for his own reasons, dear tyki chose to leave allen to die a slow death. the people tyki killed he killed in the same way: pulling out major organs, hanging them upside down a la defiled crucifix, etc. their deaths weren't quick. they bled out.

    as for the fic, do i think he would have killed lenalee in the same, torturous way? hellz yeah. because she's in his/their way and in the way of the earl's will. and she kicked him. hard. that is enough reason for him to retaliate fully using whatever means. to think he'd do any less i think takes away from his unique character, which can be very dark and sinister. and because it's so dark, when you do see that part of him where his humanity comes through, it shines even more in comparison. i hope tyki never becomes too soft (at least in the actual manga). he kinda did in my fic LOL.

    besides, he did send a large tease toward lenalee in chapter 111, page 11. it was to provoke allen but i think it speaks volumes to what tyki is capable of. i wouldn't put anything past him. it's what makes his character so interesting (to me).

    as a side note, i'll make tyki nicer in the next new fic he happens to be in :-)
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    even from the time i watched the series, from my perspective, tyki is just doing the OBVIOUS evil for fun. well, for me in the fic, he didnt really soften up but rather being forced to do so because rhode told him so. for rhode, accomplishing the earl's wishes is a big thing (like lulubell but rhode is not as..hmm..what's the word? excited? ahahah) as long as the things left behind in the process will not become hindrances, she will let them be. (just like she did to allen , though it's a diff thing because she LIKES allen ^^) and the order does need a warning and a barely living survivor (and that's lenalee, bleeding) about the danger of interrupting whatever the noah are planning.

    ah.. and tyki will surely obey rhode,as an older sister, because they are siblings by memory...just like the relationship of the older brother and a younger brother.. ^^
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    hmm... I agree with what you guys say, but I still think that Tyki was doing that to Allen for a thrill of killing and knowing he's caused suffering, but I feel that in this he is somewhat different... he's colder... he doesn't seem to be enjoying the kill.... Which is why (except from orders) he kills....

    You guys do know that since i've read this fanfic, i cant keep it out of my head... I LIKE IT TOO MUCH! (even the parts I complain about) XDDD
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    ah ME TOO!! ehehhehe SUPER XD!!

    tyki expressed this kind of doubt about himself (about killing) in the series right? he seems confused between the two natures of himself, his black and white form.
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